Sit, waiting, longing, only you
© REDCAT
My skin long for, your lips, your kiss
I know, my dream, you fill, so true
Sit, waiting, longing, only you
We lay, together, close, we two
Fulfilling need, love trading bliss
Sit, waiting, longing, only you
My skin long for, your lips, your kiss
This is my first ever try at a Triolet, and iambic tetrameter. I have so far stayed away from meters, because I find that infinetly harder in Enlish than Swedish. So I wouldn’t be surprised if by now I’m blinded to any faults.
But I had a fun time trying.
So, what is a triolet? It has about the same number of words as a quadrille, but the word-count is not what matters. Looking at Wikipedia, a triolet’s characteristics are the following.
The poem has 8 lines.
The rhyme scheme is abaaabab.
The meter is iambic tetrameter, that is, each line has four accented syllables with each accented syllable preceded by an unaccented syllable.
The first, fourth and seventh lines repeat.
The second and eighth lines repeat.
Posted as a response to Almost a Triolet at dVerse, and inspired by the often thought provoking photo at Sunday Muse # 97.
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An absolutely beautiful triolet RedCat! So romantic and full of desire. Perfect representation of the image for sure. Always wonderful to see you at the Muse!
Thank you so much! I love the Muse! ❤️
I think you did a wonderful good job, R.C. For me it was a very good triolet. I didnt count with finger taps but reading it aloud the meter was great. Fi ne rhyme, I think that would be the hardest here.
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Beautiful sensual words.
Thank you!
Very nice use of the repetition of the triolet to keep the lovers focused on each other and the reader focused on them.
So glad I got it together. Now meters and feet feels a bit less daunting.
You are a brave soul, RedCat, a triolet, oh my, the best I can do is a haiku, or two.
A tricky form, and you did well!
The triolet is a form I very much want to try. There is real musicality in this piece both because of it’s structure but also the rhythm. Stroking the keys of the piano can feel like a lovers touch, the sounds change based on how hard or soft they are touched. In this I imagined softness.
Great job on the triolet. Not easy!
This feels like a song–the rhyme scheme and rhythm give it a lovely back and forth.
Funny you should say that meter is harder in English than in Swedish… for me it’s exactly the opposite. The sense of longing is so well reflected between the poem and the image.
Nice work on a tricky form …..
I love triolets. One of my favorite forms!
I like the line you chose to repeat–and also the unorthodox use of commas separating phrases so each is a note on the piano of desire.
Splendid job on the triolet, one of my favorite forms.
One of my favorite forms. It relays your message well.
Triolets are tricksy but you did very well! Nice focus on the lovers.
We were on the same wave length :)