Nightmare Storms – A Villanelle –Ekprastic Challenge, January 30

Kerfe Roig – The Heat Breaks

In her dark mind towering thunderheads
Better to break than to abuse conform
Sparkling dreams and fragile dreams beaten dead

No pink dawn breaking to be seen ahead
The sky full of bruised clouds aching to storm
In her dark mind towering thunderheads

Starved, strangled passion bleeding out blood-red
No space for dreams outside the prescribed norm
Sparkling dreams and fragile dreams beaten dead

Clinging to sanity by a thin thread
Stuck screaming unheard in protective form
In her dark mind towering thunderheads

Trapped in a black vortex of clawing dread
Demons, nightmares and evil spirits swarm
Sparkling dreams and fragile dreams beaten dead

Shivering cold in a lonely blue bed
Dreaming of being held in embrace warm
In her dark mind towering thunderheads
Sparkling dreams and fragile dreams beaten dead

©RedCat

The form is a Villanelle in pentameter, meaning five feet per line. And although it has niteen lines (thirteen unique ones) it has only two rhyme sounds.
For me the easiest way to denote this is – A1bA2 abA1 abA2 abA1 abA2 abA1A2

I confess to some extra dark and hopeless days recently, but even so, I’m grateful to be able to say it was a long time – as in years and years – since I was in such a bad place.

I just have private reasons for wanting to help someone else expressing the same kind of bad place.

Read all poems and see all poems at The Wombwell Rainbow.

Also posted to OLN at dVerse – The Poets Pub.

Kerfe Roig

A resident of New York City, Kerfe Roig enjoys transforming words and images into something new.  Her poetry and art have been featured online by Right Hand PointingSilver Birch PressYellow Chair ReviewThe song is…Pure HaikuVisual VerseThe Light EkphrasticScribe BaseThe Zen Space, and The Wild Word, and published in Ella@100Incandescent MindPea River JournalFiction International: Fool, Noctua Review, The Raw Art Review, and several Nature Inspired anthologies. Follow her explorations on her blogs, https://methodtwomadness.wordpress.com/  (which she does with her friend Nina), and https://kblog.blog/, and see more of her work on her website http://kerferoig.com/

18 thoughts on “Nightmare Storms – A Villanelle –Ekprastic Challenge, January 30

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  1. This is so powerful….I was so wrapped up in the sense of it, in the words, that I totally forgot until the end that you were using this strict poetic form. So very well done.
    “Shivering cold in a lonely blue bed” These words at the end are absolutely chilling…no pun intended.

  2. An excellent villanelle, and a creative Ekprastic. Yes, many of us have been pushed to our emotional and mental limits secondary to the twin ailments of Trump and Pandemic.

  3. This is exquisitely drawn! I especially admire; “No pink dawn breaking to be seen ahead. The sky full of bruised clouds aching to storm in her dark mind towering thunderheads.” You have capture the state of anxiety, angst and troublesome dreams so well! 💝

  4. I always enjoy a villanelle, Helene, and yours and Kerfe’s artwork complement each other beautifully. You’ve written seamlessly within the strict form, especially pentameter and the rhyme scheme. I think most of us have had dark and hopeless days and empathise with anyone who finds themself in that situation. I love the juxtaposition of ‘towering thunderheads’ and ‘Sparkling dreams and fragile dreams beaten dead’, the image of the ‘bruised clouds aching to storm’, a powerful metaphor, and that ‘lonely blue bed’ is heart-breaking.

  5. This is such a dark place you have depicted here, but I’m pleased you managed to break out of it, and I hope your writing will give others the strength and fortitude to do the same

  6. Very artfully structured and you have also managed to hang on to a real depth of expression here too – which isn’t easy to do – Bravo! Enjoyed the read… Thank you…

  7. I get a feeling of pounding here which is both that of the sparkling and fragile dreams being pounded with setback and outright attack but also of a heart beating loudly, wanting someone to hear. The darkness of the thunderheads can be so menacing but as long as the heart is beating there is a chance for warmth again. Beautiful shadows in your vivid villanelle, Helene.

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