Crows Calling At Night

Photo by Tim Woodson on Unsplash

The Loon’s Call

Colourful crocuses poking from brown grass
The song thrush singing her tune
Miss him, miss him, miss him
Her hands dance over the lace pillow
Her lips move, but the only sound is the click of the bobbins
Suddenly her hands stop, as tears rolls down her cheek
A forlorn sound escape her
Like the loon’s call echoing over the lake at night

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Crows calling at Night ~ Li bai

Yellow clouds beside the walls; crows roosting near.
Flying back, they caw, caw; calling in the boughs.
In the loom she weaves brocade, the Qin river girl.
Made of emerald yarn like mist, the window hides her words.
She stops the shuttle, sorrowful, and thinks of the distant man.
She stays alone in the lonely room, her tears just like the rain.

Crows calling at Night – Li bai

Written for tonight’s Poetics: China – Kingdom of the Poem, prompt over at dVerse.
The Poetics’ Challenge tonight is: Select ONE of the prompt poems and with as many re-reads as needed, imagine what the poet has painted, what impressions are conveyed. 

Then – reinterpret the poem in our own style.

You can hear the loon’s call here.

The Song thrush male may have a repertoire of more than 100 phrases.


16 thoughts on “Crows Calling At Night

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  1. Such exquisite weaving of bird sounds in this one, Helene 💝💝 I especially love; “In the loom she weaves brocade, the Qin river girl. Made of emerald yarn like mist.”

  2. You’ve sustained the essence of the original while spinning this beautiful new creation. The colors, the flowers, the sounds, the heartache. I feel the pulse in this one and your voice is clear.

  3. I’ve never heard the loon in real life, only on film, but I find it so evocative, and you’ve captured that in your reinterpretation, Helene. We chose the same poem, and our versions are so different! I love the ‘song thrush singing her tune Miss him, miss him, miss him’ and the ‘click of the bobbins’ adds to the atmosphere.

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